Reflection 4.1

After getting my paper workshopped I learned quite a few things. First of all I had gotten a lot of complements on my narration of the story. I agree that I did a good job with this part of the assignment. But as I was told and I agree with I need to add more arguement into the story and maybe even cut back on the narrative part. As discussed during class I realize I really need to incorporate my sources better. I know I kind of just threw them in just for the sake of having sources. But this was partially because I could not find a good message to get across fromt the story. But now I have a better idea of how to work with te story I am writtinga about to make it more of an arguement.